Murkali's grace, once bright and fair,
Dimmed beneath an eternal glare,
Forsaking Murok's golden path,
We spiral downward far past wrath.
No longer does great Murok gaze,
His back turned from these evil days,
Our land once proud, now lost, forgot,
In shadows cold, our honor rot.
- Elder Ohvocdu
TODO
- edit book completely
- ask mr mesler to cirtique
- post book online
- invite readers to critique
- improvements
- people praising him simply while he walks to place
- childhood memories
- explore loneliness more
- sense of worthlessness
- everyone expects the world of him. but hes a friendless, loveless, otu-less bastard.
- him having nightmares of the man he killed
- describe his face in detail
- have the soldiers that frauza gathers still have importance
- right now they just all die before the fight
- have frauza update the others at a meeting on how the soldier stuff is going
- or avso updates them for him
- have avso get a few soldiers and they work with them on a mission
- make kraz female?
- yur
- each time avso talks to the emperor, it's in a different location
- make him feel bad for ohvocdu, because he has a connection with him
- they dont "train", they are always doing something important to the mission
- when skamtos is drunk, thats when he reveals he killed his father
- Foreshadow Ohvocdu singing lessons 3 more times.
- Make Frauza's reason for cheating
- make the boobies be out sometimes
- describe other boys his age
- describe emperors face
- describe how htey get food
- avso aften called to eat at fancy dinners
- describe avso thinking about his true mother in later chapters
- the team had plans, but when they learned the emepero lied, they had to do them immediately
- skamtos drunk during this
- the gold in the emperor's hair helps power him or something
- they must steal those. he takes them off for the daily cleansing
- emperor suspects luif did it because hes only stealth specialty
- foreshadow him being only stealth specialty more
- this why he dies
- describe their sports
- emporor does daily cleansing rituals with nonbelievers blood
- this is sacred
- they also do this to all the honored people in ch1 (inclindg avso)
- whats frauza's otu
- frauza had otuless child, that had to be killed
- desc economy
- art
- what does murok look like
- gold hair
- gold burnt hair
- skin of mud
- eyes of ocean
